Intention: I wanted the reader to feel scared and amazed Writing Focus: To make my writing interesting to read by adding language features

That moment when my eyes thought the next thing they are going to see is heaven, but instead they saw that marvellous glow of orangish heat. I'm blue. The waves full of immense pressure were giving me a headache while I was staring at the burning lava bursting in flames from the volcano. I'm shaking. I'm warm. My eyes are filled with fear as they watch the boiling, red gas floating on the thin air. I fall. I shut my eyes in peace.