Intention: I want my reader to feel excited & happy. Writing Focus: I choose language that is appropriate to the topic, audience and purpose

I fly! I am soaring in the sky with my wings flared out. I am set free, unrestricted.  This is reality, admiring the beautiful greenery and the broad and wide sky! I feel special. I feel like I came right out of hell to heaven where I can stare at the amazing nature around me. I am in paradise! I am so eager to see the rest of the world, how much it has changed. Being trapped in a cage, grounded makes me feel so terrible. Now that I’m free, I have no reason to think about that unhappy past. I clear my mind. I got rid of my distraction and continued looking at the scenery. The amazing view was just unbelievable. The water droplets splashing at me as I fly across a waterfall. The sounds of nature. This feeling.

Intention: I want the reader to feel amazed and scared Writing Focus: To make my writing interesting to read by adding language features

My skin was burning and my feet were wet when my eyes saw the marvelous scary view. Blistering hot with chilli, soaking making me feel all joyful, but still fearing it. Funny expression was on my face. Amazing. Fun. Something I never felt before. Boiling lava standing together with cool water seems almost impossible, magical. The sky was mad and angry at the moment. Mist all around me. I'm scared to think about what could happen next. I don't know what to do, I'm so confused. I just want to go back to where I came from but I forgot where I am. I just stand frozen. In the dark. All alone.

Intention: I want my reader to feel excited & happy. Writing Focus: I choose language that is appropriate to the topic, audience and purpose.

I run! I am jumping up and down in excitement in front of the christmas tree. Everyone is in high spirits. I am so eager to open up my presents to see what I got. The glow.  The ornamental tree attracting my eyes to it with its stunning looks makes me feel like I am in paradise! I think about the big surprise with the pretty decorations on the big tree. It makes me feel on the cloud nine! At this moment, I am allowed to open up my surprise to reveal what I got. My hands are tearing up the wrapping, my eyes are staring meticulously at the giant box in my hands. This feeling I have. Only once. Slowly fading, My eyes see nothing but black. Suddenly, My lap feels a pounce on it with something pawing at me. I felt a shock coming to me! I jump! Standing still, with my mouth stuck wide open with an astonished look on my face. I could not believe this! I pick up the dog. My mind is confused, thinking about whether this could be real.

I've always wanted a dog! I was like a dream come true! This moment cannot be real but the feel of being able to snuggle such a soft thing just makes it so cozy! This brings the ambience of happiness to the house!

Intention: I want my reader to feel excited & happy. Writing Focus: I choose language that is appropriate to the topic, audience and purpose.

I run! I am jumping up and down in excitement in front of the christmas tree. Everyone is in high spirits. I am so eager to open up my presents to see what I got. The glow.  The ornamental tree attracting my eyes to it with its stunning looks makes me feel like I am in paradise! I think about the big surprise with the pretty decorations on the big tree. It makes me feel on the cloud nine! At this moment, I am allowed to open up my surprise to reveal what I got. My hands are tearing up the wrapping, my eyes are staring meticulously at the giant box in my hands. This feeling I have. Only once. Slowly fading, My eyes see nothing but black. Suddenly, My lap feels a pounce on it with something pawing at me. I felt a shock coming to me! I jump! Standing still, with my mouth stuck wide open with an astonished look on my face. I could not believe this! I pick up the dog. My mind is confused, thinking about whether this could be real.

I’ve always wanted a dog! I was like a dream come true! This moment cannot be real but the feel of being able to snuggle such a soft thing just makes it so cozy! This brings the ambience of happiness to the house!

Intention: I wanted the reader to feel scared and amazed Writing Focus: To make my writing interesting to read by adding language features

That moment when my eyes thought the next thing they are going to see is heaven, but instead they saw that marvellous glow of orangish heat. I'm blue. The waves full of immense pressure were giving me a headache while I was staring at the burning lava bursting in flames from the volcano. I'm shaking. I'm warm. My eyes are filled with fear as they watch the boiling, red gas floating on the thin air. I fall. I shut my eyes in peace.