Why having a Pit bull is a bad Idea.

In the first 5 months of 2013, pit bulls (American Pit Bull Terrier) inflicted 93 percent of all dog bite injuries. So what you ask? Well at least half of the attacks were on children. I believe that having a  pit bull is a bad idea.

Pit bulls were originally bred to be violent. They were brought into dogfights and started to learn how to really fight. Pit bulls make up only 6% of the dog population, but they’re responsible for 68% of dog attacks and 52% of dog-related deaths since 1982. That is more than half of dog attacks. Would you really want an aggressive Pit bull who comes from a breed that is responsible for more than half the dogs attacks in your house?

Pit bulls are born to be aggressive but then is it really the dogs to blame? A lot of the time the owners don’t realize the danger that their dog is capable of causing. They will let their dog be around young children without a lead and only a few glances of supervision.  So then is it the dogs fault that their natural instincts are to be violent and aggressive.

Pit bulls will always have violence in them. They usually attack in groups. This gives them more power. This is not very good for us though because it usually takes 2 or 3 people to pull the dogs away from their victim.

Do you really want your kid in danger of a pit bull attack.

Ask yourself, would you rather have a dog full of personality and love then a dog capable of killing?

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Why should the internet be free. A persuasive piece by Twiss.

What percentage of the world’s population do you think currently has access to internet? 75%, 50%. Answer is much lower than that at only 33%. That’s 5.3 BILLION people without access to the things we take for granted everyday. They have never read an E-mail or checked the news online, sometimes in countries where newspapers and TV are scarce they may not have access to the outside world. They don’t have access to the many jobs you can earn money off on the internet. This is something that has been around for 35 years and still some countries are completely unconnected.  

The internet is not free and for some people the price of internet is way too high. In America, the richest country in the world, 26 million people cannot afford internet. This means they have access to the internet but can’t afford it. The average price of internet in America is $63 New Zealand dollars a month and the average of price of internet here is even higher at $85 New Zealand dollars a month. There is no reason for these high prices, for example, South Korea the country that has the fastest internet in the world, only costs $36 New Zealand dollars a month. It’s not that expensive to run and provide internet as South Korea shows us, the high internet prices are because of greed.

But why do we need to give internet to those who don’t have it? Imagine if you didn’t have internet, no e-mails or YouTube, no googling things you don’t know, we would be set back years without the internet. Now put yourself in the shoes of those billions without the internet. Maybe it’s because these places don’t have stable enough internet to power a server but for the places with power the internet should be available and free.

If the internet was opened up to all the people without it then millions of jobs would be opened up, be it in the IT industry maintaining and upgrading internet servers or working online from home, earning an income and providing for their families.

In a perfect world the internet would be free and available for everyone, but the world is not perfect. Yet. Give it a few decades and maybe the world will be a better more internet filled world.

Manaiakalani Film, The True Story of Cinderella (By: Sofiya, Natalie and Ana)

My Focus:Is to add more detail and punctuation.

It was a stormy night,the wind was howling through  the house.The house shifted from side too side.It was the night of night of Halloween me and my mates had been to every house on the street but, this one. The house was a old and haunted they say. We walked through the muddy thick grass too get too the deck .The deck creaked with every movement, there were cobwebs everywhere.We knocked on the door the knock echoed around the house.Suddenly the door flung opened like the hulk just punched it , Then the door broke in half.We decided too walk in with fear in to the house.The house was cold and damp It felt like someone was watching us with every step.We couldn't see anything it was all pitch black.We heard a creak behind us we, fling our heads behind us but nothing was there. We looked around asking if anyone was there. But there was no replies we kept on looking for the owner of the house.It started too get a bit late so we decided too leave but suddenly, a dim of light went away in the darkness.We heard a giggle near us, Then Suddenly i shattered to the floor in fright People jumped out of the floor.But we weren't expecting what we expected......       

Intention: I want my reader to feel excited & happy. Writing Focus: I choose language that is appropriate to the topic, audience and purpose

I fly! I am soaring in the sky with my wings flared out. I am set free, unrestricted.  This is reality, admiring the beautiful greenery and the broad and wide sky! I feel special. I feel like I came right out of hell to heaven where I can stare at the amazing nature around me. I am in paradise! I am so eager to see the rest of the world, how much it has changed. Being trapped in a cage, grounded makes me feel so terrible. Now that I’m free, I have no reason to think about that unhappy past. I clear my mind. I got rid of my distraction and continued looking at the scenery. The amazing view was just unbelievable. The water droplets splashing at me as I fly across a waterfall. The sounds of nature. This feeling.

Intention: I want the reader to feel amazed and scared Writing Focus: To make my writing interesting to read by adding language features

My skin was burning and my feet were wet when my eyes saw the marvelous scary view. Blistering hot with chilli, soaking making me feel all joyful, but still fearing it. Funny expression was on my face. Amazing. Fun. Something I never felt before. Boiling lava standing together with cool water seems almost impossible, magical. The sky was mad and angry at the moment. Mist all around me. I'm scared to think about what could happen next. I don't know what to do, I'm so confused. I just want to go back to where I came from but I forgot where I am. I just stand frozen. In the dark. All alone.