Intention: I want my reader to feel excited & happy. Writing Focus: I choose language that is appropriate to the topic, audience and purpose.

I run! I am jumping up and down in excitement in front of the christmas tree. Everyone is in high spirits. I am so eager to open up my presents to see what I got. The glow.  The ornamental tree attracting my eyes to it with its stunning looks makes me feel like I am in paradise! I think about the big surprise with the pretty decorations on the big tree. It makes me feel on the cloud nine! At this moment, I am allowed to open up my surprise to reveal what I got. My hands are tearing up the wrapping, my eyes are staring meticulously at the giant box in my hands. This feeling I have. Only once. Slowly fading, My eyes see nothing but black. Suddenly, My lap feels a pounce on it with something pawing at me. I felt a shock coming to me! I jump! Standing still, with my mouth stuck wide open with an astonished look on my face. I could not believe this! I pick up the dog. My mind is confused, thinking about whether this could be real.

I've always wanted a dog! I was like a dream come true! This moment cannot be real but the feel of being able to snuggle such a soft thing just makes it so cozy! This brings the ambience of happiness to the house!

Intention: I want my reader to feel excited & happy. Writing Focus: I choose language that is appropriate to the topic, audience and purpose.

I run! I am jumping up and down in excitement in front of the christmas tree. Everyone is in high spirits. I am so eager to open up my presents to see what I got. The glow.  The ornamental tree attracting my eyes to it with its stunning looks makes me feel like I am in paradise! I think about the big surprise with the pretty decorations on the big tree. It makes me feel on the cloud nine! At this moment, I am allowed to open up my surprise to reveal what I got. My hands are tearing up the wrapping, my eyes are staring meticulously at the giant box in my hands. This feeling I have. Only once. Slowly fading, My eyes see nothing but black. Suddenly, My lap feels a pounce on it with something pawing at me. I felt a shock coming to me! I jump! Standing still, with my mouth stuck wide open with an astonished look on my face. I could not believe this! I pick up the dog. My mind is confused, thinking about whether this could be real.

I’ve always wanted a dog! I was like a dream come true! This moment cannot be real but the feel of being able to snuggle such a soft thing just makes it so cozy! This brings the ambience of happiness to the house!

Intention: I wanted the reader to feel scared and amazed Writing Focus: To make my writing interesting to read by adding language features

That moment when my eyes thought the next thing they are going to see is heaven, but instead they saw that marvellous glow of orangish heat. I'm blue. The waves full of immense pressure were giving me a headache while I was staring at the burning lava bursting in flames from the volcano. I'm shaking. I'm warm. My eyes are filled with fear as they watch the boiling, red gas floating on the thin air. I fall. I shut my eyes in peace.

Intention: To make my reader feel delighted and calm. Writing Focus: To Control my sentences so they are short and long and I can make my writing flow

I sit there, remembering. The moment when I heard a wonderful song. Such a calming melody making my spirits lift up with my heart beating along with the rhythm of the song flowing into my ears.  It was totally miraculous! The beautiful harmony and tune made me feel untroubled and tranquil. I felt tired. Tired enough to doze off on the sofa with my mind clear. I stayed up. Not bearing to fall asleep missing such an incredible song! This was not just an ordinary album. It was very unique in its own ways. It had so much effect!  It was totally supreme, it made me feel so delighted and pleased to have listened to such a beautiful song! I really hope that miraculous moment could just come back to me right now.

Intention: I wanted the reader to feel amazed and relaxed. Writing focus: To Control my sentences so they are short and long and I can make my writing

I am strongly stuffing my Mouth with immense flavour while a miraculously odd and enjoyable feeling in spirits makes my feelings all joyful. My belly is amazingly following the blissful taste of paradise. I feel like simply wishing at a well that I can feel that amazing feeling again. I felt like I tasted a cloud. Touching my taste buds , is a soft and sweet taste. The brown icing making my mouth feel like chocolate.  Everything around me seemed to be in a half mist while I try imagining what could this magic possibly be…

Intention: To make my reader feel amazed and blessed. Writing Focus: To Control my sentences so they are short and long and I can make my writing flow

I am just astounded! The way everyone is motivated to learn with the guidance of some teachers is just unbelievable. All I see is the stunning and scenic scenery with the cheerful children and the grins on their faces, from ear to ear. Everyone is with a device in their hands, making it so fantastic for us to learn. This is the most marvelous and magnificent classroom to be in. The Joyful happiness of the children standing and running all around the place with their heads filled with numbers and clever sentences makes me feel like I am dreaming one really happy dream mixed with all of my thoughts. I feel so blissful and thrilled to be within this learning palace. I am sure everyone knows they are very blessed and fortunate to be in the most wonderful learning space ever!

Intention:I wanted the reader to feel amazed and happy.Writing focus:To Control my sentences so they are short and long and i can make my writing flow

I am stepping into a vast place, it is the favourite place of the most brood in all of the school. For a second it looks like a jungle in which a lot of endearing chimpanzees ascend. I really feel like I could just run in there and join them… There are loads of immense excitement. It is surrounded by foggy meadow and dry, but muddy land. I see smiles, actually blissful and uproarious smiles. There are diminutive and big children. It is simply amazing to finally stare at a place which I have heard of only in the stories.  I feel like I am just dreaming, my mind is in a whirl thinking about how real this could become.