tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8519653141566030390.post7490458762627149983..comments2019-10-01T21:56:14.110+13:00Comments on Learning Hub 3 2015 @ Stonefields School: My Focus:Is to add more detail and punctuation. School Apps Ownerhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/08629777795087603003noreply@blogger.comBlogger2125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8519653141566030390.post-60609317611665030652014-09-22T11:44:00.568+12:002014-09-22T11:44:00.568+12:00You've used some great vocabulary in here. I l...You've used some great vocabulary in here. I love the image of the cobwebs and creaking desk.I'm keen to read what happens next.Chris Bhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00825357151473899048noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8519653141566030390.post-50131335842707360282014-09-08T11:39:45.108+12:002014-09-08T11:39:45.108+12:00Great use of adjectives Jae to create a vivid pict...Great use of adjectives Jae to create a vivid picture in the readers mind. You created powerful images in my mind, I was hooked. You created great suspense - short sentences are always effective to do that.Sarah Martinhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17088921855811622988noreply@blogger.com